Katmandu - Biralu Sthitibhan
धेरै राम्रो लाग्यो । अरु पनि सुनौ न
great work gokul ji! nepalko paristhiti ra pariwartanlai ramrosanga pradarshan gariyeko chha.
गोकुल ब्रो!
ल ल जाओस्। कविता राम्रो छ।
अब प्रतिकृया पनि दी हालुम् क्यारे!
मलाई घत परेका केही हरफहरु दुरुस्तै उदृत गर्न पाउँदा,
>तर पनि २,४ नमिल्दा कुरा विदेशबाट ल्याएर फेर्न मन लाग्छ।
>पुतली जस्तो चिरिच्याँट्ट परेको मेरो पुतली सडक,
>तिमिसित नैतिकता हैन-फगत नेता छ।
माथिका वाक्य या वाक्याँशहरुमा धेरै गहिराई छ र गहकिलो प्रस्तुती छ।
हो, म पनि जब समुद्र किनार पुग्छु, कति पटक त म पनि यहाँबाट अलिकति समुद्र चोरेर लैजाऊँ जस्तो महसुस सोचेको छु।
ठिकै लागेका कुराहरु भन्नु पर्दा,
>सगरमाथा जस्तो अग्लो मेरो धरहरा
अब व्यक्तिगत रुपमा म लेखकसित कति पक्तींहरुमा सहमत छैन। असहमती जनाउन मिल्ने हो यदि भने मात्र है,
१। माओबादी आन्दोलनकारीहरुलाई बिरालोसित तुलना गर्नुबाट आन्दोलनलाई निकै हल्का रुपमा लिइएको आभाष दिन्छ।
२। क्याम्पसममा हुने विध्यार्थी आन्दोलनको मोल बूझ्न नसकेको या नचाहेको देखिन्छ।
अस्तू!
महसुस सोचेको छु। -> सोचेको छु।
Aanch Dadagiri bro
Reaction ta khoob chwank diyo ni :)
On a serious note, your both points are noteworthy. Regarding the intensity of maoist movement, you should note that the poem was written in 1999. At that time, it was definitely not like this. Also, there was a news that Ascol students were involved in making bombs and destroying public properties. I definitely heard a howl when "I saw the best minds of my generation destroyed by madness"
माओबादी आन्दोलनकारीहरुलाई बिरालोसित तुलना गर्नुबाट आन्दोलनलाई निकै हल्का रुपमा लिइएको आभाष दिन्छ।
Dadagiri,
Chiniya Bhasa Tonal Bhasa Ho.. Bhaneko, Eutai Sabda Ko 4 Dekhi 12 Ota Artha Lagna Sakcha..Yedi Pahilo Tone (First Tone/Neutral) Prayog Garera Mao Uccharan Garne Ho Bhane, Tyasko Artha Biralo Huncha.
Gokul ji:
Your writing has the ability to pull one into a quagmire of thoughts and feelings; oomkanai garo!
Keep writing pls!
goku ji, late padhiyo tara ramrari padhiyo :)
dehrai ramrari lekheko , malai ni yo ek line le ta atti nai chuyo..
Tara pani 2/4 namilda kura, bidesh bata liera ferna maan lagcha
:)
Gokul ji, dherai ramro - tara Kathmandu bhanda sara Nepal lai ogatera lekhda ajhai bes hunethiyo ki? La aru pani padum na..
din bhari sajha ma base pani anta ma badha gahakilo kura padhna paiyo gokul ji.
estai aru pani chhan bhane kripaya padhna pau.
ma pani kunai bela ascol mai padheko, tapaita ma bhanda agadi nai hola hai??
yea ramro cha . ani samasamayik pani.Pices le bhane jhai kathmandu matra nabhayera singoo desh Nepal lai nai sameteko bhaye jhan ramro hunethiyo.
Gokul dai,
Hajur ko rachana dherai ramro lagyo. Kata kata school ko kitab jasto pani lagyo....kata kata exams ma udrit garera lekhney lines haru jasto pani lagyo ....
When I was in KTM this past August, ma pani chakka parera " Ke bhayo....ke bhayo...." bhandai din haru bitaye....
Aru pani sunna pau !
Dear all,
Thanks for your generous support. To those who wanted to see the picture of whole nation, instead of just Ktm, the following (although not cheerful) is presented.
GOKUL JEE very nice poems. i liked your last poem very much. it is worth appreciable. i wish i were like you !!!!
MERO DESH....
JE JASTO BHAYE PANI
JASARI CHALE PANI
HAJARAU PRACHANDA LE JANMA LIYE PANI
ANAGINTI NEPALI AKALMAI SAHID BHAYE PANI
AAKHIR DESH MERO HO
MALAI MERO DESH PYARO CHHA.
SOMALIYA KO HABIGAT BEHOREE PANI
GIRIJA KO VASTACHARI MAHIMA TULU TULU HERE PANI
DEWBA KO WAKKA LAGDO SUGA RATAI SUNE PANI
DWANDA KO BHUMARIMA PILSIYE PANI
AAKHIR DESH HAMRAI HO
HAMILAI HAMRO DESH PYARO CHHA.......
ramro cha ...keep on writing:)
Gokul bro, Don't know how I missed this thread... :D I am supposed to be here in sajha 24/7 and yet I jhandai missed those poems... Kasto meetho lekhya ho!! Wah wah... Pahile pani poems haru chapiya thiyo sajha ma??? If yes, I have enuff time today to go dig sajha archive.. ehehe... and pardesh.com too... :P
Could you post more poems?? please, thanks.. :D
dherai ramro gokulji, kathmandukole man nai chhoyo ra mero desh ta maile pani paradeshma padheko ho. yeso deshko kura garda malai pani euta kawitako yaad ayo jun paradeshma koritopaleko thiye, ramro naramro testai ho tara desh ta deshai ho bhanyajastai mero kawita.anyway nice piece gokulji!
MERO AFNAI DESH
jaha murkhaharuko kami chhaina
jaha garibharuko bhumi chhaina
ragatma muchhiyeko afantako lashma
ani ekkasi harayeko santanko aashma
bhijeka pareliharu tolayirahechhan harek nimesh
kahi hoina saathi ho! yo ho mero afnai desh!!
purkhale paskeka paurakhka gansma
deshprem bechi sampattiko ashma
magi hidne magneharuko hulma
pachhutayirahechha aguwaharuko bhulma
luchhachudipachhi chhuteko yo sano sesh
kehi hoina saathi ho!yo ho mero afnai desh!!
jungle,gufa ra bideshma bilayeko sakti
rastraka harek kunama gariyeka bhakti
khera gayiraheko yo niriha pal
ashu chhopdai haso nikalna gariyeko bal
herdai royirahechha yo pariwesh
kahi hoina saathi ho!yo ho mero afnai desh!!
kehi hoina saathi ho!yo ho mero afnai desh!!!
ASTU!!!
GOkul ji ko Kabita Ekdamm nai ramro lagyo.Khai Kathamandu... and Mero desh, both are excellent. Sarai maan ma lagne lagyo malai.Bastavikta jhalkincha bhanm na. Please keep on posting your creations.
High voltage ko Kabita " Mero afno desh" pani sarai ramro cha. Yesto kabita nepali font ma nai padda tyasko "weight" alik badi huncha (lagcha), tara malai yo pani sarai maan paryo.
Keep it coming guys.
IndisGuise:)
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